Re-written for Muse on Monday where David
asks us to write a story that shows the explicit
passage of time by noting the points in time as
our stories unfold. Revised from a story I wrote
in 2024, here’s where the prompt took me.

7:27 AM Friday. I step out of the shower, towel off and choose today’s outfit.
7:30 AM. Phone chirps; it’s a text from Drew: “Hey, sorry! I know it’s early. Got any plans this weekend?”
[OMG! My heart starts racing. My biggest crush in forever is asking me if I have plans this weekend. OK, get a grip. I don’t want to appear too anxious; after all, we’ve never actually dated – just the occasional coffee after walks in the park with our dogs, Arlo and Bert.]
[Alright. A sufficient amount of time has passed.]
7:40 AM, me texting: “This weekend? Um …. I don’t think so. What’s up?”
[Just the right tone. Cool and calm; neither describes me at the moment. Gotta love texting. It’s so impassive when necessary.]
7:42 AM, Drew texting: “I scored 2 tix to Springsteen for Saturday nite in …. RU ready 4 this? Vegas!”
[Vegas! I love Vegas! I love Springsteen! I’m practically hyperventilating. Settle down and take a deep breath. Remember …. cool and calm.]
7:44 AM, me texting: “Sounds fab! Lemme check my calendar. BRB”
[Exit text, count to 30.]
7:45 AM, me texting: “Hey Drew, my weekend’s open.”
7:46 AM, Drew texting: “Excellent! Bree, listen. It means spending the night and getting back late Sunday. I don’t want to push you. RU cool with this?”
[Am I cool with this? Am I cool with this?! It’s sudden but I have to admit it’s what I’ve wanted for a long time. Gotta go for it.]
7:50 AM, me texting: “I won’t lie, Drew …. it is kinda last minute but I’m in; it’ll be fun.”
7:52 AM, Drew texting: “This is gonna be an amazing weekend, Bree. I’m so happy you said ‘yes’. CU at your place tomorrow AM at 7:00. The flight’s at 10:00.”
7:54 AM, me texting: “Perfect! I’ll be ready.”
My head’s spinning. This is really happening! So much to do before tomorrow! Skip lunch today and go to Victoria’s Secret. Get a bikini wax on the way home from work. Pack tonight. And ask Gerry next door to take care of Bert.
I couldn’t concentrate at work and the excitement kept me awake most of the night. I’m up at 5:30. Time for coffee and a shower.
A quick glance at the clock …. ten minutes before Drew gets here. I place my carry-on bag on the bed, toss in my toothbrush and zip it up.
The sudden shrill ring of the doorbell startles me. Forcing myself not to lunge for the door, I pace myself, smile and casually open it to see Drew smiling back at me, one arm cradling Arlo, his other arm around the shoulder of a stunning redhead in tight jeans and a Springsteen tank top. My smile freezes in place as I instantly connect the dots.
“Bree! This is Charlotte. I’m really glad you can take care of Arlo this weekend; we’re so psyched about this trip. We’ll pick him up when we get back Sunday night. Thanks, Bree. You’re a real pal!”
Taking the pup, I manage a “Have a great time” and watch Drew and Charlotte walk down the hall toward the elevator. They’re laughing in that intimate way, heads close together. Slowly I close the door, my stupid grin gone as I snuggle Arlo.
“Hear that, bud? I’m a real pal.”
NAR©2024, 2026
This is “Waitin’ On A Sunny Day” by Bruce Springsteen
All text and graphics are copyright for Nancy Richy and are not to be used without permission. NAR©2017-present.

Nancy, I *love* what you did with the prompt. Great story, but oh! what a heartbreaking twist at the end. I didn’t see it coming. One of your best stories, here.
-David
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Thanks so much, David. I think we can all relate in one way or another to a texting miscommunication. My poor MC certainly ended up feeling great disappointment; I’m sure her time to shine will come. This was a fun prompt. Thank you.
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Oh dear. I wouldn’t give him his dog back.
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Spoken like a true dog lover! 😄
Thanks, Di.
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Hehe.
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Oh, wow, that’s quite a twist. Well, I guess that dude wasn’t worth it in the first place. Though not getting to see the Boss must have really hurt!
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Even with all the modern technology, there’s still failure to communicate! Thanks, Christian.
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I was feeling so happy for her, and then….woof.
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It all went to the dogs! Thanks, dear Keith.
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Poor girl, cringing situations
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Totally. I feel for her.
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Oh no! Good one Nancy!
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The dangers of texting! Thanks, Tiffany.
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Nancy, can you give me Bree’s number, as I have a four-day vacation that I need to take in Vegas before it expires, and I can’t find anyone to go with me.
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I’ll text you, Jim. She’d like that! 😄
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I hope I get to see her new bikini wax.
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She showed class.
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Absolutely! Thanks for pointing that out, Ernie.
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Yet another clueless male.
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Haha! So true, D. Thanks!
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Is her face ever red.,…
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Not at all what she expected! Thanks, John.
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Loved the twist!
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Thanks, Jodi. It can happen so easily.
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Wake up girl your more than just a doggy sitter! … You’ve really explained the dangers of not being crystal clear in a text 💜💜💜
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Thanks, Willow. Texting can be so easily misconstrued.
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yes indeed it’s true 💜😂😄
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Oops!
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Not at all what she was expecting.
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😅
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