David ben Alexander, The Skeptic’s Kaddish,
has inspired me to take a page from his book
and create my first Dectina Refrain Poem
You
looking
at us five?
We are unique.
How we worry you!
Why are you so afraid
when you don’t even know us?
Our five hearts are breaking for you,
consumed with hate, so unaccepting.
“You looking at us five? We are unique.”
NAR © 2023
This is Doobie performing “Hate Song” *
* Language
Dectina Refrain:
- Ten Lines
- Syllabic: 1/2/3/4/5/6/7/8/9/10
- The tenth line is comprised of the first four lines all together, as one stand-alone line in optional quotation marks.
Here is a link to David’s site:
I hope you’ll join me
for Birthday Thursdays.
Who are we celebrating?
https://rhythmsection.blog/
The Elephant's Trunk 
I have difficulty with free verse, I’d never attempt that! Well done!
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Thanks, Keith! Something very new and different for me, too!
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This is the first time I have seen a Dectina. And it was amazing
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This was the first time I did a Dectina. And it was amazing!
Thanks so much, Sanjeet. I’m glad you like it!
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Glad this is rhetorical. Love the song, the poem, and the solid straightforward structure of both.
💜🎶💜
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It was a pleasure introducing everyone to
a few of my lesser-known family members. 😂
Thanks for your thoughts, Liz.
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I love your dectina, and video too. Well done, Nancy!
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Thanks so much, KK.
It was great fun learning something new!
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I wonder why I’ve never heard that song on the radio? 🙂 I do like Lily Allen’s style of music. Kind of like Victoria Wood with a slightly better voice and different accent. 🙂
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Hmm. I wonder if it was banned?
(A little nod to my other website 😉)
I’m not familiar with Victoria Wood
so I’ll have to take your word on that one.
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I agree with Lilly 💜💜💜😂
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😂
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Oh! I just thought the song is definitely not directed at you 💜💜💜
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❣️
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I must be off the wider consensus tracks a bit; I love this song. I love the gristle and bite of it. It’s raw and a bit too close to the bone for comfort, which everybody needs from time to time. ps: glad to see my boys are holding their own. 😂😂
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If you’re off the tracks, I’m right there with you.
That’s exactly why I went with this song.
You get me, sis, and yes … your boys are def hanging in. 😂
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Yes in deedee! 😂 geez this is what happens when you use a microphone to type a comment – what what is in DD?
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🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
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Fabulous! 👏👏👏
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Thanks, Les! Appreciate that muchly!
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Did you read Brazanne Muse’s Dictain? She flips it. I think it’s a great form.
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I didn’t. Interesting! I don’t know who she is. I’ll see if I can find it.
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Found her. Wonderful!!
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Brill! 👏
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The Dectina! How interesting. And the last line … amazing. Beyond my capability. Yours is great!
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Thank you, Sighs!
This was great fun;
give it a whirl. Seriously.
It starts with just one word!
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So many words to pick from ….
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I’ve finally settle on one word. “DO” But I don’t know yet what I’m doing to do with it.
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That’s a start!
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My thoughts? I think my country, our society, has descended into a morass of greed, ignorance, and ugliness. Is it because of or a result of our idolization of those that lie, cheat, and steal?
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I’m taking that as a rhetorical question, Allen.
I don’t have the answers, only to say
“Evil starts at the head of the snake”.
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Hey you volcano🌋… that form looks great on you!!
MEDIC 🖤
(somebody said Take no prisoners…yeah)
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It does, doesn’t it? 🤣
Glad you like it; I really enjoyed this.
And how about that exceptional art??
TNP! Hell yeah, baby! 🌋❤︎
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I love this right on 🍂🍂🍂
Here a little video that also says the same.
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HAHAHAHA!!!!
But, how do you really feel, Willow?
Thanks! This is great! ❤︎
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Spot on and beautiful.
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Thanks, Sadje. I really enjoyed the Dectina.
I’ll definitely do more!
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It’s a nice form.
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Who are the cute little guys? And also – wow – that’s one depressing song!!
❤
David
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Yeah, the song is kinda “in your face”;
that’s been my mood lately. LOL 😆
These cute guys? Just a few of my relatives!🗿
I’ve got a closet-full! 🤣🤣
Thanks for the Dectina, David! 💫
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That reminds me … I must whip up some new relatives for you for Christmas. 🎄
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Oh, yes! I’m seeing antlers in my future 😂
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Hula pine tree skirts…. red noses…
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I can’t wait! 🗿🎅🏼
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