Breathing new life into a story from 2021 for Jim’s “Space” challenge.

Marcy Grey was sixteen, neither a kid nor a woman. She was one of those unpopular girls, just her unlucky lot in life for which there was no explanation. A wisp of a thing, she had a constant look of sadness in her eyes. Having no friends she’d spend most of her time alone, often on the roof of her apartment building gazing at the stars, dreaming of space travel and listening to her parents Beatles CDs. Their music and message resonated with her more than anything else in the world and it was the only time she didn’t feel lost and scared.
Her parents worried about her, as parents are wont to do, and they encouraged her to pursue activities in school or join a club of some sort. Marcy half-heartedly tried a few times but never felt accepted or welcome and eventually gave up. School was almost over for summer break and while others were chit-chatting about going to camp or planning a family vacation, Marcy knew the long days of July and August would be no different for her than any other day in her life. Her parents worked hard, barely making ends meet; there was no time or money for recreation.
One night Marcy overheard her mother talking on the phone with her sister, Marcy’s Aunt Rita; from the snippets of conversation she knew they were talking about her. “She really needs a diversion … We’re worried … She’s so sullen … Well, that sounds wonderful – are you sure? … I have no idea how she’ll feel about it, though … Yes, I’ll talk to her and call you back.”
Not surprisingly a few minutes later Marcy’s mother knocked on her bedroom door. “Aunt Rita bought a little beach café in Atlantic City and wants to know if you would like to spend the summer with her. Rita would love the company and could use some help at the new place.”
Marcy frowned and told her mother she’d think about it; at least that wasn’t a flat rejection. And she did think about it, weighing her options. The pros: she really liked Aunt Rita; Marcy had never gone anywhere, ever; she was stuck in a small apartment with her parents; she could look at the wide-open sky at night and the stars dancing off the ocean; she might actually have fun. The cons: leaving her rooftop comfort zone. The next morning she shocked her parents by announcing she would spend the summer in Atlantic City with Aunt Rita.
Marcy was met at the bus depot by Rita all decked out in her bright pink sundress, straw hat, Ray Bans and sandals, giddy and happy as a clam. As she drove to her house Rita talked non-stop about her fabulous new beach café, The Pink Flamingo. Even Marcy found her aunt’s enthusiasm contagious and couldn’t help smiling.
There were seven other teenagers waiting tables at the café; all of them were nice and greeted Marcy warmly. Work wasn’t easy and it took Marcy about a week to get accustomed to her new life but she found she actually liked it. Surprisingly Marcy enjoyed being with her co-workers and meeting new customers every day. But the best part was climbing the dunes at night, sitting on a blanket and gazing at the stars while listening to “Rubber Soul”.
One night on the beach Marcy saw someone approaching. She got nervous until she realized it was Adam, one of the guys she worked with. He asked if he could join her and Marcy said yes. Adam had an MP3 player, as did Marcy, and she asked him what he was listening to. He smiled shyly and answered “Revolver. I was raised on the Beatles”. Marcy grinned and handed Adam her earbuds. Music wasn’t the only thing they had in common; Adam spent most nights back home gazing at the stars. He was a loner with no real friends and this was his first time away. And to their complete amazement they discovered they both lived in Queens, NY.
Marcy and Adam met at the beach every night after work and talked about everything. The end of summer was drawing near and their time together in Atlantic City was almost over. They rode the same bus back to Queens, exchanged phone numbers and gave each other a quick hug before going their separate ways.
Late that night as Marcy sat on the roof of her apartment building she got a text. It read “Hey, Stargazer. Dream sweet dreams for me”.
Smiling, she quickly wrote back “Dream sweet dreams for you”.
Stars aligning? Time to make a wish.
NAR © 2023
And then, there were two. Lovely story with a great and very promising ending 🙂
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Such a lovely story Nanc!💕
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Thanks, Cin! I’m kinda partial to it myself. 💞
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There are many things to love about this story, Nancy. An interesting character who immediately evokes empathy from the reader. I was cheering her on and as a quiet shy stargazing kid myself, I related to her. And you’ve written a sweet YA romance. 💞 Wonderful!
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Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with us. Michele! I’ve yet to meet anyone, man or woman, who’s journey through life has been perfect. The adolescent years are often the most difficult to navigate. It’s an honor for me when someone says they connected with one of my characters. As a writer and educator, you know how meaningful that can be. Thank you, Michele! 🌟
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You are welcome, Nancy. I value your views and your thoughtful response to my comment. Thank you!
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How sweet ❤️
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Thanks, Deb! I’m getting a lot of ‘sweet’ comments. It might be time to bring in a slasher story! 😂
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Still waiting for the kidnapping
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🤣
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Oh, I love this one N.! Nice job. I wondered where the slasher went…
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Ok, I’ve got one vote for a slasher and one vote for a kidnapping. Poison, anyone?
Thanks so much, D!
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A lovely story Nancy. Enjoyed the ending too.
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Thank you, Sadje. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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You’re most welcome
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Stories like this are needed to remind us that beyond the doom & gloom there is real beauty to be found.
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Always appreciate your very gracious comment, Nick! 🌟
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I like!
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Thanks, John!
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Sweet. 🥰
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Thanks, Misky! 🌟
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Thanks for sharing your wonderful story, Nancy.
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My pleasure, John!
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I am Jim, but that is OK.
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Oh goodness!! My apologies; I knew that, Jim! A momentary brain freeze!
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written in the stars?
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Hey, that’s a really good title! 🌟
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Definitely rooting for them! 💜
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Something tells me it’s all gonna be ok. Keep wishing on a star!🌟
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